Drabble: Completion of Remus Lupin

[ceredwensirius]

Title: Completion of Remus Lupin
Author: ceredwensirius
Word Count: 295
Characters, Pairing: Remus, Sirius, Remus\Sirius
Rating: NC17
Summary: James was an unwitting witness...now what?
Disclamer: Characters are not mine
Author's Notes: This was posted previously under a different user name however this author was me. This is my first slashy anything and like with all things new, I'm nervous about it.


A long, careful swipe of tongue licks pearly salt from the tip of his hardness which he still only tentatively presents. Remus can't quite believe this is happening, despite the fact that this has been on going for a couple of weeks now. Sirius drops his playful demeanor behind the close of curtain and is an earnest, heated lover. Uncertainty never plays a role.

The velvety fire of Sirius' mouth envelops him, seeming to want to swallow him whole. The dark head at his waist bobs and Remus feels the rush and flare of heat in his face. This is followed by a wet smacking sound as Sirius pulls away to speak.

"That turned you on, didn't it?" asks Sirius. His breath warms the tip of Remus' cock.

"What?" replies Remus, dazed, hard and not really up for conversation. Damn Sirius and his teasing.

"When you realized James was watching, I was rubbing you. You twitched. You only do that when you like something." Sirius puts his mouth back on him, and he's being slow about it.

Remus can only groan a sort of soft, pleasured sigh but he knows Sirius is waiting for an answer. He can feel those pale eyes burning into him.

"I think you want to be watched," says Sirius, pausing again.

And then it's not Sirius' mouth but his hand, pulling and squeezing perfectly; just how Remus likes.

"What if we hadn't noticed, what if I had sucked you off right there with James watching?"

Remus comes then, at the very thought of it, painting Sirius' neck and chest in hot, thick ropes of white. He glances down at Sirius who is smirking at him with that maddening grin.

"Oh, shut up," says Remus, before collapsing back against the bed.

Comments

[toujours-nigel.livejournal.com]

guh.

but you knew that.

[catsintheattic.livejournal.com]

First slash fic and you go for the full package. *g*

No need to be nervous. Writing is about learning and getting better, not about being perfect. *hugs*

I think that you've captured Sirius's cheekiness and Remus's shyness very nicely. I also liked how comfortable they were around each other. You've made their sexual encounter about their relationship and not the other way around.

Typo alert: it should be "And then it's not Sirius' mouth" instead of "its".

If you are interested in more detailed concrit, please let me know.

[ilexx.livejournal.com]

This was well written. You always do a great job of injecting the characters' personalities and dynamics into even a tiny snapshot.

[ghostgum]

A Remus who likes to be watched?

...works for me. *grins*

[duck-or-rabbit.livejournal.com]

Oh, I think this is really, really lovely. Honestly. I know you've written the boys having each other off, but within that context Remus and Sirius seem connected and whole. What I enjoy about this pairing is the palling-up that occurs between them as mates and the intimacy they can find in their own unique manner, and I think that spirit is completely here. For example:

"That turned you on, didn't it?" asks Sirius. His breath warms the tip of Remus' cock.

"What?" replies Remus, dazed, hard and not really up for conversation. Damn Sirius and his teasing.

Wonderful job, :D.

[snapini.livejournal.com]

Oh wow, it was you who wrote this? Definitely no need to be nervous about posting, this was wonderful.

[secretsolitaire.livejournal.com]

*faints* Very hot.

[ladyannikaa.livejournal.com]

first slash?!? *awed*

[brighty18.livejournal.com]

Delicious! Remus getting off on being watched? Mmmm...

Sirius drops his playful demeanor behind the close of curtain and is an earnest, heated lover. Uncertainty never plays a role.
That feels so real to me!

[disby.livejournal.com]

I do hope you get to read this...it's been a while after all!

Just wanted my scrap to be a part of your first non SB/HG fic especially an S/R fic!

It was the first kind of fanfiction that I stumbled upon and it will always hold a place in my heart for that very reason....I still remember being petrified by my very first slash drabble.... how can anybody think they're gay??!?!??

I've only ever read S/R fics in the slash section....believe it or not because I couldn't begin to picture him with another woman....!!!
Since Remus and Hermione are somewhat alike and their almost uncanny resemblance to yours truly I'll always enjoy reading those fics....

Congratulations again!!!:)