I think love is a very good motivation to start exploring a character, because when you love someone, you want to be close to them. And to write well means first of all to be close to your characters.
Bit of concrit: The use of "he" when James was mentioned for the first time confused me, because I didn't read the summary. It would have been easier with a name.
Reading the story again, I have to tell you that I really like how Sirius playfully controls the situation. And Remus answer in the end is just perfect, because he makes it clear that this dynamic they shared in bed won't spread over into their daily interactions.
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Date: 2009-05-18 08:11 pm (UTC)Bit of concrit: The use of "he" when James was mentioned for the first time confused me, because I didn't read the summary. It would have been easier with a name.
Reading the story again, I have to tell you that I really like how Sirius playfully controls the situation. And Remus answer in the end is just perfect, because he makes it clear that this dynamic they shared in bed won't spread over into their daily interactions.