First off, I am thrilled that I can finally say publicly how marvelous this was. And it’s funny, in some ways it was SO you and in some it was quite surprising.
Obviously, it was well-written with a marvelous blend of plot, smut, and character development. Those are some of your trademarks: really well-balanced fiction. Hell, you even write action well (which I personally think is tricky) and those scenes at the orphanage were really powerful. I love how it was a love story and the major force of it was about Remus and his love for Sirius, but there was an exciting aspect to the plot as well. That makes for a good read as well as a smutty read. (That probably sounded awful, but I meant it as a compliment.)
Also very you is writing an extremely sexy Sirius. Sirius leaned against the desk and grabbed the bottle, long legs stretched out in front of him, thighs parted wide by the back of the chair riding between them. The seal tore as he twisted off the cap and then filled both glasses with amber liquid. "Here," he said, offering Remus the tumbler of whiskey. His eyes were mischievous under dark lashes, an amused smirk curling around the corners of his mouth. Sirius was gorgeous, all hard muscle and bad intentions under a white oxford and tight jeans.Your Mr. Black is always eminently fuckable in the best possible way.
But he is more than that, and you totally get that. I can totally see him staying in that relationship with Lily and James simply because he didn’t want to hurt his best friend – or even Lily. It is also why he’d get into that in the first place. He is so fiercely loyal and devoted to his friends. You get that. Just as importantly, you get that hidden, fragile side of him. "I was jealous of James, but it didn't have anything to do with wanting him. He was only ever a distraction from what I actually wanted. I was jealous he'd gotten his someone and I didn't think I ever would." That is precisely Sirius, so needy and so fearful of not being loved. I adore that aspect of him and you really write it well.
What did surprise me, however, was how well you wrote Remus. I’m not saying I didn’t think you could write Remus, I’m saying that I think of you as a “Sirius person,” but you really wrote this like a “Remus person.” By that I mean it wasn’t just writing Sirius through Remus’ eyes, it was really writing Remus as if you knew him/were him. And that speaks volumes for you as a writer.
This was just extremely well done.
PS THANK YOU for the happy ending, too! I needed that!
PPS My computer is doing this annoying thing in which the curser jumps about unexpectedly. It's quite annoying and, if something doesn't make sense here, that is why.
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Obviously, it was well-written with a marvelous blend of plot, smut, and character development. Those are some of your trademarks: really well-balanced fiction. Hell, you even write action well (which I personally think is tricky) and those scenes at the orphanage were really powerful. I love how it was a love story and the major force of it was about Remus and his love for Sirius, but there was an exciting aspect to the plot as well. That makes for a good read as well as a smutty read. (That probably sounded awful, but I meant it as a compliment.)
Also very you is writing an extremely sexy Sirius. Sirius leaned against the desk and grabbed the bottle, long legs stretched out in front of him, thighs parted wide by the back of the chair riding between them. The seal tore as he twisted off the cap and then filled both glasses with amber liquid. "Here," he said, offering Remus the tumbler of whiskey. His eyes were mischievous under dark lashes, an amused smirk curling around the corners of his mouth. Sirius was gorgeous, all hard muscle and bad intentions under a white oxford and tight jeans.Your Mr. Black is always eminently fuckable in the best possible way.
But he is more than that, and you totally get that. I can totally see him staying in that relationship with Lily and James simply because he didn’t want to hurt his best friend – or even Lily. It is also why he’d get into that in the first place. He is so fiercely loyal and devoted to his friends. You get that. Just as importantly, you get that hidden, fragile side of him. "I was jealous of James, but it didn't have anything to do with wanting him. He was only ever a distraction from what I actually wanted. I was jealous he'd gotten his someone and I didn't think I ever would." That is precisely Sirius, so needy and so fearful of not being loved. I adore that aspect of him and you really write it well.
What did surprise me, however, was how well you wrote Remus. I’m not saying I didn’t think you could write Remus, I’m saying that I think of you as a “Sirius person,” but you really wrote this like a “Remus person.” By that I mean it wasn’t just writing Sirius through Remus’ eyes, it was really writing Remus as if you knew him/were him. And that speaks volumes for you as a writer.
This was just extremely well done.
PS THANK YOU for the happy ending, too! I needed that!
PPS My computer is doing this annoying thing in which the curser jumps about unexpectedly. It's quite annoying and, if something doesn't make sense here, that is why.